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| Author: | Gwanky [Thu Jul 30, 2009 9:36 pm ] |
| Post subject: | The official poetry thread |
Because why not I wrote these Feel free to add your own and criticise (Some of these were written while tripping and using a broken keyboard i don't edit pieces written in a separate state of mind even for typos) not entirely sure why we chooose to be high is it because of a vibe or the beat of the sky is it when the birds come down or when the worms rise from the grund prey and predators protects eachother the destroyers are preserver swine flu is my flu at mill hill i count by two me and you cannot be unless my perciption on reality is cracked in which case you can't come back for i've had a heart attack of the mind a child cries one thing i have learned to blacken my eyes soldiers line up for war citizens take it no more bombshells sing a bittersweet symphony of victory in city streets the grandmother cries out "what is the price for peace" her voice is dinnned by the rest of the crowd despite her protests she yells so loud as the world zooms up to a sattelite view i sit comfortably at home as do you the news comes in through your roof and we choose to ignore the proof our actions caused this our votes revolved it and we keep going for fear of fallin this world we live in is next to another. it can't be explained with simple rhymes and beats my brother. They exist in our world but we can't see them excvept when the situation is dire enough to lead them out from there cowering terroist holes into the world where they get bulldozed these are creatures that are not afraid of george w bushs army of rage they control all what they dont is petty i'll stand and fight them with just a machete our world is parralel to an alien one filled with invaders armed withguns the connection is see through transparent glass youc an't see through it but i got past and i went and i fought and i'm back and i'm fine and now i just need a glass of wine but theres more i need to tell you for your safety none of us is safe and none of us is free <<Keep it PG-13, please -M>> This time i'll rhyme to speak my mind I've got lessons to teach not morality to preach now listen cause i don't repeat Everything alive has gotta eat I'm not the one to blame i play the game This is a world where you have to kill Surviving is easy but to live takes skill Straight lines lead to canned lies Right from the gutter I speak to you now one man to another Sit in a chair let down your hair Breathe in out don't be afraid of the round about Take note of the words wrote The one who has seen it all leaves no regrets when death calls |
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| Author: | Tycho [Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:14 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
You have way too much time on your hands. |
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| Author: | Vaius [Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:37 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Poetry... I remember when my english teacher made our class write odes to things. People chose stuff like sports, reading, the usual random stuff. And of course, I wrote mine on computers. |
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| Author: | FinalWarrior [Fri Jul 31, 2009 1:07 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
/discerningelitistsniff http://griffinhart.livejournal.com/ I'll start handing out comments and critiques when I'm in a less-sleep deprived state of mind. -- Griffinhart |
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| Author: | Switch [Fri Jul 31, 2009 5:48 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
"The official poetry thread" Hey OP you misspelled 'emo'. |
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| Author: | Rickton [Fri Jul 31, 2009 10:33 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Quote: <snip -M>
Seriously? Did you really just say that?
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| Author: | Miah [Fri Jul 31, 2009 11:54 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Yes, he did. Keep it cleaner than that. I don't want google to get the wrong impression. |
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| Author: | Rickton [Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:22 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
I think that particular line was PG-13 because it sounds like something an 11-year old would write. |
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| Author: | FinalWarrior [Fri Jul 31, 2009 4:17 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Quote: "The official poetry thread"
Huh, I didn't realize that Shakespeare, Poe, Chaucer, Pope, Johnson, Wordsworth, et. al. were all emo! Thanks for teaching me things that my literature teacher didn't, Switch! /sarcasmHey OP you misspelled 'emo'. Maybe, before you start passing judgment on an entire medium, you should actually read some good works from said medium. -- Griffinhart |
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| Author: | Switch [Fri Jul 31, 2009 8:15 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Quote: Quote: "The official poetry thread"
Huh, I didn't realize that Shakespeare, Poe, Chaucer, Pope, Johnson, Wordsworth, et. al. were all emo! Thanks for teaching me things that my literature teacher didn't, Switch! /sarcasmHey OP you misspelled 'emo'. Maybe, before you start passing judgment on an entire medium, you should actually read some good works from said medium. -- Griffinhart |
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| Author: | FinalWarrior [Fri Jul 31, 2009 9:05 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
And I was cranky from having roughly two and a half hours of sleep because SOMEONE decided to have KIDS and expect ME to take care of THEM. In other news, I hate my family. :D -- Griffinhart |
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| Author: | Switch [Sat Aug 01, 2009 12:10 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Quote: And I was cranky from having roughly two and a half hours of sleep because SOMEONE decided to have KIDS and expect ME to take care of THEM.
Yeah I read your blog. Enjoy it In other news, I hate my family.  -- Griffinhart 
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| Author: | Tycho [Sun Aug 02, 2009 9:15 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Also, Gwanky. Who made this damn thread "official"? |
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| Author: | Rickton [Sun Aug 02, 2009 9:58 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: The official poetry thread |
Didn't you know? Gwanky's this forum's official high-art critic. |
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