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     Post subject:The official poetry thread
    PostPosted:Thu Jul 30, 2009 9:36 pm 
     

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    Because why not

    I wrote these Feel free to add your own and criticise
    (Some of these were written while tripping and using a broken keyboard i don't edit pieces written in a separate state of mind even for typos)

    not entirely sure why we chooose to be high is it because of a vibe or the beat of the sky is it when the birds come down or when the worms rise from the grund prey and predators protects eachother the destroyers are preserver swine flu is my flu at mill hill i count by two me and you cannot be unless my perciption on reality is cracked in which case you can't come back for i've had a heart attack of the mind


    a child cries
    one thing i have learned to blacken my eyes
    soldiers line up for war
    citizens take it no more
    bombshells sing a bittersweet symphony of victory in city streets
    the grandmother cries out "what is the price for peace"
    her voice is dinnned by the rest of the crowd
    despite her protests she yells so loud
    as the world zooms up to a sattelite view
    i sit comfortably at home
    as do you
    the news comes in through your roof and we choose to ignore the proof
    our actions caused this our votes revolved it and we keep going for fear of fallin

    this world we live in is next to another. it can't be explained with simple rhymes and beats my brother. They exist in our world but we can't see them excvept when the situation is dire enough to lead them out from there cowering terroist holes into the world where they get bulldozed these are creatures that are not afraid of george w bushs army of rage they control all what they dont is petty i'll stand and fight them with just a machete our world is parralel to an alien one filled with invaders armed withguns the connection is see through transparent glass youc an't see through it but i got past and i went and i fought and i'm back and i'm fine and now i just need a glass of wine but theres more i need to tell you for your safety none of us is safe and none of us is free

    <<Keep it PG-13, please -M>>


    This time i'll rhyme to speak my mind
    I've got lessons to teach not morality to preach
    now listen cause i don't repeat
    Everything alive has gotta eat
    I'm not the one to blame i play the game
    This is a world where you have to kill
    Surviving is easy but to live takes skill
    Straight lines lead to canned lies
    Right from the gutter I speak to you now one man to another
    Sit in a chair let down your hair
    Breathe in out don't be afraid of the round about
    Take note of the words wrote
    The one who has seen it all leaves no regrets when death calls


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     Post subject:Re: The official poetry thread
    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:14 am 
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     Post subject:Re: The official poetry thread
    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:37 am 
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    Poetry...

    I remember when my english teacher made our class write odes to things. People chose stuff like sports, reading, the usual random stuff.

    And of course, I wrote mine on computers.

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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 1:07 am 
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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 5:48 am 
     

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    "The official poetry thread"

    Hey OP you misspelled 'emo'.


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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 10:33 am 
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    Quote:
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    Seriously? Did you really just say that?

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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 11:54 am 
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    Yes, he did.

    Keep it cleaner than that. I don't want google to get the wrong impression.


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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 12:22 pm 
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    I think that particular line was PG-13 because it sounds like something an 11-year old would write.

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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 4:17 pm 
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    "The official poetry thread"

    Hey OP you misspelled 'emo'.
    Huh, I didn't realize that Shakespeare, Poe, Chaucer, Pope, Johnson, Wordsworth, et. al. were all emo! Thanks for teaching me things that my literature teacher didn't, Switch! /sarcasm

    Maybe, before you start passing judgment on an entire medium, you should actually read some good works from said medium.

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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 8:15 pm 
     

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    "The official poetry thread"

    Hey OP you misspelled 'emo'.
    Huh, I didn't realize that Shakespeare, Poe, Chaucer, Pope, Johnson, Wordsworth, et. al. were all emo! Thanks for teaching me things that my literature teacher didn't, Switch! /sarcasm

    Maybe, before you start passing judgment on an entire medium, you should actually read some good works from said medium.

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    I was joking dude.


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    PostPosted:Fri Jul 31, 2009 9:05 pm 
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    And I was cranky from having roughly two and a half hours of sleep because SOMEONE decided to have KIDS and expect ME to take care of THEM.

    In other news, I hate my family. :D

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    PostPosted:Sat Aug 01, 2009 12:10 pm 
     

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    And I was cranky from having roughly two and a half hours of sleep because SOMEONE decided to have KIDS and expect ME to take care of THEM.

    In other news, I hate my family. :D

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    PostPosted:Sun Aug 02, 2009 9:15 am 
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    Also, Gwanky. Who made this damn thread "official"?

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